Vocals are nice.
Rocker0305 you give a nice swinging/shuffling feel to the song.
If you both are willing to upload separate tracks i think a better mix for especially the vocals can be made. The sound of the vocal can be made more shiny, clear, transparent using some eq, compression etc. In that way the lyrics are more clear to the listener. And mixing with separate tracks the vocals will shine above the accompaniment, also if more tracks are added.
My drums and percussion were made for a straight feel song so ...
they have quantised straight 8th notes in stead of swinging/shuffling (triplet feel) 8th notes.
I can make triplet based tracks for this song if it develops.
I will upload my already made 8th note feel tracks.
If more instruments are added drums come in to give more body.
Nice how simple percussion can set a mood for a song concept.
Here some inspiration for guitar:
I visited Music Fair Utrecht, The Netherlands last weekend march 5, 2017 and attended a clinic of Gerry Leonard guitarist of David Bowie
In the dropbox you find his performance and ...it is spacy and special/extraordinary
The atmosphere is like Pink Floyd
Here are my 108 bpm 8th note feel tracks in 24 bit wav 44 kHz
I also have bongo's and a djembe that can be added made special for this song.
I will upload a track to be part of this project.
Some Pink Floyd look alikes
Comfortably Numb - Pink Floyd (straight 8th note feel)
Pink Floyd - Shine On You Crazy Diamond (6/8 swing shuffle feel)
Pink Floyd - Dark Side Of The Moon (8th note feel)
Pink Floyd - Time (1974) legendado (8th note feel: heavily filled up with percussion and drums towards a more heavy approach, with multivocals)