Song workspace for Hard Rock #8 Ballad

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McRock
2/17/2018 6:20:27 PM

I'm going to take another crack at it tonight... I'll take your advice into account... Lots of fun... It would be cool to see a Manumus version of the goin' to saturn approach....

KevRees
2/17/2018 1:09:40 AM

Manumus, if you're still working on this, it wouldn't be a problem to have different versions.
KevRees
2/17/2018 1:08:55 AM

McRock, you've actually got something there. I especially like the first verses. It went a little unclear melodically from the middle 8 onwards.  I think if you want to make a finished recording you'd need to listen carefully to where you go out of tune here and there, but if you want to keep working on it I'd be happy to. One thing - I certainly wouldn't go for the delay and reverb, though.
Lyrically it reminds me of ELO's Ticket To The Moon.

McRock
2/16/2018 11:53:38 PM

i'm goin' to saturn
in a dusty old moon ship

it's torn and tattered
a seat that's mostly ripped

this old rocket
was the best friend I could find

a place to go
get you off my mind

oh rocket ship
take me to that place

oh rocket ship
take me to that place

that place in the sky
let's take a little trip

i'll name her glory
kiss her lips

a million miles
i'm never looking back

if I could find a place
where I belong again

she went away

i might not come back

oh rocket ship
take me to that place

that place in the sky

never looking back

i'm goin' to saturn




McRock
2/16/2018 11:49:38 PM

I enjoyed your music, had to take a try at it. Pretty sure it's not what you are going for but I'll share what I came up with
manumus
1/2/2018 6:32:44 AM

OK.. i c where u want it to go .. i think ...just let me c if i could bring it down a notch ..ciao amigo
KevRees
1/2/2018 12:40:35 AM

I know it's a rough version, but some of the notes don't go with the chords, so if you could listen closely to get those, as some of the changes aren't quite as expected... but the ideas are fine. Actually, I'd prefer the overall sound to be softer if that doesn't mess up your feel for the song. I mean, you got it so soft on "Knowing You"! That was just so sublime. Of course, that's not what you're going for here.
manumus
1/1/2018 8:46:33 AM

heres a very rough cut .. levels arent good and a few vocals to . but i want ur feed back where i should go ..should i continue or what ... ciao amigo



KevRees
12/30/2017 5:27:03 PM

Yeah, that works!
manumus
12/30/2017 2:04:54 PM

heres another way of the intro ... i found myself some new head phones .. but maybe it wont help!! lol.. just tell me what u like ? i didnt even know there was a piano track ... really nice with piano ..anyways .. merry christmas .. and happy new year !! ciao amigo



KevRees
12/28/2017 4:35:24 PM

Some good ideas there - but please use the later backing upload (02/11/2017), with keyboards added. The first verse should be piano backing, and then that leads me to think that the first verse I'd really prefer to be more gentle. Sounds great the second time but I feel it's a bit sudden! Know what I mean? I can hear you're going for that Bowie thing, which I like.
manumus
12/28/2017 6:04:42 AM

lyrics
HELL.....
 heard uv been well 
got something to tell
...
im feeling alright 
with devils inside 
...
lost control
bleeding soul
im waiting for u 
for u
.... 
HELL
heard uv been well 
got something to tell
to to doo do 
 
FELL 
lost my control
my burning soul
...
got something on my mind 
aint waisting no more time 
to tell you

manumus
12/28/2017 5:52:45 AM

heres an idea for the intro .. dont know if u like .. the sound aint to good cause my head phones are scrap it vibrates with bass sounds i got to get new ones ...but if u like the way it begins i will continue ...and ill fix the back vocals if u want me to continue .. ciao amigo 



KevRees
11/2/2017 3:15:29 PM

KevRees has updated the song concept.
KevRees
11/2/2017 3:12:14 PM

Here's an arrangement with keyboards added



manumus
11/1/2017 11:52:48 AM

such a beautiful sound ..melody..song .. nice ..really nice wow!!!
KevRees
10/6/2017 1:24:12 AM

The backing still needs a LOT more work - some mistakes here and there, and basic arrangement and mixing.
KevRees
10/6/2017 1:23:34 AM

KevRees has updated the song concept.

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